As I
approached the cold and
freezing water my feet tingled with excitment. I dropped to the ground and looked down the lane. It was time for the countdown - Go, I sprinted as fast as I could and finally approached the ......
This is a snippet of how I succeded during my race.....
Kia Ora Beni,
ReplyDeleteYou have been busy posting this week, I would have loved to have read even more detail, this paragraph seems unfinished. You have a good swimming stroke in freestyle. What do you need to focus on to improve even more?
Remember to reread your work out loud to your self and check with a buddy please.
Mrs Nua